Although the lake is blue, they don’t call the park green for no reason, the water is surrounded by grassy fields with freshly cut grass. Freshly cut grass cut by men are also the ones who made this park and lake. Everything is made to entertain humans nothing is really naturally there but the way they make it is great. The park is on a hill that looks down on a part of downtown as well as looking up at some parts, such as high rises. If you stand on the hill you can feel the smooth breeze hit your face and you feel like that is where you are supposed to be. The scent of the flowers hits your nose as you inhale causing goose bumps to form on your skin.
Even though you do make descriptive details about the "freshly cut grass" you do repeat in the next sentence making it lose it's intent. You also could have used more lively readers to captivate the reader such as how use "smooth" to describe the wind and make it more great for the reader to experience. Somehow you forgot to post the thesis in order for the reader to get a background of what you are going to describe in your essay so the reader can a have hint of this particular place in Houston.
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