Thesis: My favorite time of the year happens to be that time when all of the luminescent icicles come out to dance like professionals while the sweet and spicy scents seduce my nostrils like vixens of the night. Around the town, perky bells are heard and the radios are blasting with singers trying to make a buck or two by covering classic songs. As annoying as those tunes may be, drivers can’t bring themselves to change the station and they soon fall victim to the infamous, “Tone Deaf Sing-a-Long”. The procrastinators of Houston come out to fulfill their shopping needs as some stores raise their prices while some stores feel the generosity and show it by having a “Tag Sale”, which in turn never truly lower their prices, they just make costumers feel that way.
Oh the joys of Christmas.
Body: More specifically, the joys of Christmas in the Galleria and its surrounding area. The area is incredibly amazing enough, but when mid-November rolls around, the area transforms practically overnight. The light poles now represent candy canes while the bus stops, which now support giant wreaths, stand next to ridiculously oversized ornaments. Around the edges of buildings, holly hugs it like strong willed vines in a confused tropical rainforest. Every so often, titanium, “Christmas Trees” appear on the side of the road, somewhat confusing small children and occasionally their parents. All in all they decorate the already glamorous streets to make it look like you’re stuck in a giant, Christmas themed, 54 degree snow globe, but since we’re in Houston, minus the snow.
So that just makes it a globe.
Oh the joys of Christmas.
Body: More specifically, the joys of Christmas in the Galleria and its surrounding area. The area is incredibly amazing enough, but when mid-November rolls around, the area transforms practically overnight. The light poles now represent candy canes while the bus stops, which now support giant wreaths, stand next to ridiculously oversized ornaments. Around the edges of buildings, holly hugs it like strong willed vines in a confused tropical rainforest. Every so often, titanium, “Christmas Trees” appear on the side of the road, somewhat confusing small children and occasionally their parents. All in all they decorate the already glamorous streets to make it look like you’re stuck in a giant, Christmas themed, 54 degree snow globe, but since we’re in Houston, minus the snow.
So that just makes it a globe.
I thought it was great that you used a national holiday and then narrowed it down to festivities in Houston. The Galleria was a good place to use, since it is widely known and used in our city. Also, I could really picture what you were talking about when you were decribing the way Christmas looks. I thought,"So that just makes it a globe." was a funny comment. You showed your personality in your writing.
ReplyDeleteYour introduction was set up perfectly. It really drew me in and I felt that I had to keep reading. The way you used figurative language really roughy you introductionto life. The figurative language gave me a better sense of what you were trying to show the reader. I also enjoyed how you explained how the galleria area transforms overnight, because it seems that way to me as well. Overall your introduction paragraph was set up just right and it gave me a good sense of what your essay was going to be about.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis is great because christmas is one of my favorite holidays you did an excellent job at describing Chirtmas time. I would agree with you on your body paragraph overnight the whole city turns to this jolly time which I love. All the ways you described chirstmas was right on point for instatance you said "when all of the luminescent icicles come out to dance like professionals while the sweet and spicy scents seduce my nostrils like vixens of the night." This wanted me to want Christmas to come so much faster. Great story and I bet the rest amazing.
ReplyDeleteThe first thing that got my attention is the title. I think it is very effective and grabs the reader from the beginning. Your similes, like vixens seducing your nostrils, is great. It makes the paper come to life and makes me want to keep reading. Now, I can't wait to see the Galleria lit up.
ReplyDeleteI like your very last statement it adds humor to your paragraph. The way you use sensory details leads me to picture the mall and all the greatness it has while covered in christmas decorations. I have never seen Houston galleria during christmas but I am anxious to do so now.
ReplyDeleteYour descriptions are really great! I love how you got me to imagine of how it is during christmas at the galleria. It makes me want to go to the galleria when christmas comes around. I am excited for that. Your doing a really great job!
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